Wow... um... I'm not really sure to say about that. It's a really sad and well-written short story. The ending seems sort of abrupt, and you may want to make it more flowing and "pretty". You also want to make sure that her fiery-red hair is mentioned int he beginning. I think this is a very interesting short story and I like it, but I think it may be even better and more powerful if put into a long poem form or some form of prose. Anyways, I liked it, and I didn't see any grammar errors. Keep writing. :)

This is an amazingly inspirational piece. I love the heroine, in all her young wisedom and unconcious, unlearned grace, a person enchanted with wonder and things she'll never know and better left unanswered. A lovely line from this is "She vowed never to end up old and bitter like them. She would wonder at the moon every eve, and die dancing, her head a giddy whirl." It...captures? who she is in a sentance, and it's a beautiful person you've lead us to read.

In her way, as her life goes on, it reminds me of a few Greek myths. Baucios and Philemon, the old couple who live together and wish only to die together, entwined forever as trees. Also, the story of Penelope (sort of, anyway) and how she tricked the suitors, coming to claim Odysseus' lands, into thinking she would marry when she wove the burial shroud for her long-wandering husband's father. In a way, since your red-gold haired heroine weaves her marriage veil-turned-death shroud for her husband, it /is/ the same. Or not. I don't know what I'm trying to say here, alluding to Greek mythology, but I'm definetly aluding to something. o_O

The end shows us a far different person than the one we started with. She's almost insane in her devoution to her and her husband being together forever. In fact, I do believe she is insane XD In a nice way, though. A nice way.

It makes me happy more people than I know about the Seelie/Unseelie court. :smile: