This is such a beautiful, sad story. It so sweet and sorrowful that he loves her so much he really would die for her. And it's such an original story- I've never heard one like it before. There are no undertones or overtones of other authors or other pieces; wherever you thought this up, congradulations. It's original, pristine, and perfect. I feel bad the girl had to die, because it destroyed my secret hope she was an Unseelie court fey. Or Seelie. Whatever. Still, it's beautiful the way it stands, and you shouldn't change a thing.

That was sad, but good, a bit fast paced it would have been nicer if it was slowed down a bit to make it more of an enjoyable read.