He's really straightforward for a dorky-seeming guy.

Anyway, the great feeling I get from the story is that you put events in it that I'll be able to remember for the rest of the story...the cookies, for example. Each event helps to set the characters personalities. That's good, especially for such a brisk pace in the first chapter. It holds a good flow to it, in other words.

The problems I had was that the flow could be too fast. Premonition of being out-of-character. Etc., etc.. Naturally this is typoless, which balances the pros and cons somewhat. Somewhat.

Definitely is something great, though. Something different.

8.5/10

Oh...very sweet and sad. Couldn't stay that happy for long, I guess. Much like life. This story strikes kind of a chord with me because I'm so intolerant of anorexics or people who think they're ugly when they're really fine. I'm one of those people who's thinking "Why don't they just snap out of it?" Even though I know (I know!) it's way more than that and everything. Agh. Alright, as always awaiting your updates.

two sides, nice story though, deep thoughts, in the characters... update love it

That's sad...why does it have to be sad? Keep up the good work!

Hooray for your updates! This story is really special. Every chapter is unique and interesting and poetic and a treat to read. Please don't abandon the story...if that's ok. Cheers!ps: The best thing about him is still the fact that he's Jewish and a Monty Python fan. Remember that. (J/k)

Aw...that was sweet. I hope that you update soon. Keep up the good work!

Don't feel unloved! I may be lazy and a terrible procrastinator, but I'll always love you and KTC! ::hugglehuggle::

That was amazing! Firstly, I loved the whole layout of this chapter; it's short and sweet but ends in just the right place. Secondly, I think it's beautiful the way she's "improving," and the way she's starting to change for him... and how he's so infatuated with her... ah...

::superflyinghuggletackleglomp:: I loved it! Gah! Superkawaii! Write more! More!

"...and then averting their(?) eyes when the other looked at them(?)" This phrase sounds a bit odd...I mean, I know what you mean but you're taking in singular, right? I have no idea how it could be re-phrased though...

Love, love, love the last sentence. Again, your writing flows smoothly.

Please continue!

Please, PLEASE, I'm begging you, DON'T tell me this is over. This is one of the best stories I have ever read on this site. I love everything about him. And her. And their relationship. But especially him. I ADORE MONTY PYTHON! I think television's spoiled real entertainment! In the old days we used to make our own fun at Christmas parties! I used to strike myself repeatedly on the head while crooning!

Agh! I just can't express enough appreciation for this fantastic story! I grovel at your feet to continue! Hehe, pathetic I know. :)

This is amazing. I love the way you write. Your descriptions are like poetry...my mouth was definitely watering during the pizza scene last chapter.

He sounds adorable! And she *is* beautiful. I wish she would realize it.

Please continue!

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:dances: I get to be the first reviewer! Ye-ah!

The way you described the tangle of bramble, vines and trees... "The tangle of trees and vines, in the dark night, looked amazingly wild, primeval." I love it! SO great. The whole "living in the moment" theme is really great-- it seems all allegorical, but also like just a great story. Butterflies in her veins? O, the desciptive bliss! :D The new chapter makes me exicited.

I love it but it seems unfinished somehow...

whoa. is that the end? anorexic freaky girl... AHH attack of the 85 pounder! just kidding i used to be, too.

OH, my god. This is amazing! Seriously, this entire story flows so well and it's so original. I love it! Update soon.

I liked it. I feel sad for the girl because she wants to be skinny. And for the boy becasue he works so hard. However, I like it anyway.