 Cloak-of-Shadows 2006-02-27 . chapter 1Excellent poem here. Not very good at critiquing these... if I write a poem, it would be about love lost or starcrossed lovers...
Like the way the poem starts as the woman questioning what's love, realizing it, and finally fufilling in the end. My suggestion is... well... umm... how was the woman at first feeling while speaking? Sad? Angry? Irritated? And so on and so forth. Descriptive words and or actions can in my opinion can intensify the emotions the poem is about. Remember this is only a suggestion :p
I enjoyed the rhyming scheme, and it was a good read. |