First lines of both stanzas are poetry of the best sort.

Wow... Now this one I really liked. Your poems have a simplistic elegance about them... it's refreshing.

lovelovelove the last stanza.

"Your soul sunk in six thousand years of sand/ a mile under the ocean". SO PRETTY! Very image yummy and a good symbolistic approach to losing oneself in despairing emotions. short but not lengthily angsty! ^.^ *wants more*

interesting, i like the way you wrote this.