i like the chalkboard metaphor, though i'm not sure exactly what it means.

Hm I dont know either haha.

I think I was blown away by the first two I reveiwed.

I dont think I hate this piece. I just think there could be so much more to it. I sort of was waiting for a big bang at the end.

I love the beginging of this piece. Comparing a voice to thuder where you just want it to stop but it wont... its so loud and boisterous you just want to kill it.

I did not like the cliche of chalk and chalkboard... though I got the whole moving on and describing the nightmare.

The piece altogether wasnt my fav of yours but it has tons of potential... I dunno I wanted more.

Write on.

much too pretty for words. all i can say is that this poetry(along with the rest of yours i have read)has hit me with such an impact that i havent felt in such a long time. welcome to my favorite authors list.

Weird. . . Nice descriptions. For me, it kind of makes this image of someone just verbally assaulting someone else, taking them down a notch with all of the things that they wish that other person would be for them, the things that they just aren't and can't be, no matter how hard they might try. Um. . . anyway. I like it, and I like the sentiment that I took away from it, even if it wasn't what you intended. : DGreat job!

great descriptions naomi. short but intense. keep it up naomi. ick my poems are put to shame. lol.

~lindsay

short but powerful. it made me feel uneasy. the chalkboard comparison is good. it made me start hearing screechy noises. i lika this.

interesting... the words mingle in such a way... good job

keep writing!

its a brilliant confusionmakes me feel lost when i am at home.

i like

i really liked that. i love the imaginary.

the chalkboard comparison reminds me of nails on chalkboard *shudders* I liked the comparison with thunder, very clever.