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| Lady Sakaki 2006-03-20 ch 1,  | abuseAnother amazing write! Excellent ending. My favorite part was the dogs! Ha! Also loved the word you chose, "hairlines"...fits it perfectly. |
| Dirty-Angle 2006-02-23 ch 1, | abuseI like it. Alot. Beutiful. I particularily liked the part about the scream being heard by dogs.Keep up the good Write. |
| drippingdreams 2006-02-23 ch 1, | abuseI JUST wrote something kind of like this. Or at least, it has similiar elements. The "broken pieces" theme. Very beautifully done. I especially like the bit about the dogs pawing, trying to comfort you. Also the description "I splintered in slow fine lines/They spread from the base of my back,/Followed the sinew and muscle,/Parted my very matter." |