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Nathan Ridge
2008-07-14
ch 1,
abuseHmm, my thoughts vary on this poem. For starters, it's very personal in unexpected ways, not that there's anything wrong with that. Each stanza molds itself to the life of the reader, each pointing out different things. This may not be true for everyone but I certainly see a lot of my own habits and stresses in the poem as I read it.

The last line threw a massive twist in it though. Before the last line, I felt as if this was a melancholic attempt to accept the unacceptance of a close friend. Upon reading the last line, I find myself amazed at how different the poem has become. In my mind, the last line gives the reader a sense of selflessness while also hinting at a twinge of narcissism. Really though it's a confounding effect which adds that much more depth to an already profound poem.

Although I've never heard you talk, I can truthfully say I hear your voice speaking here. Your rhythm is so natural and flowing, I almost feel like I've known you for years; I've read many poems written by famous authors that didn't converse with me the way this one does. I applaud your natural talent.
Cait Street
2006-05-12
ch 1,
abuseomg, can i hug you?This is so full of emotion i just can't get over it. Your so incredibly talented, i'm so jealous. I'm going to tell my friend to read this now because she has feelings similar to this poem. Its so unbelieveably amazing!
Chrissie05
2006-02-24
ch 1,
abusewow i really like it...and can definately relate!!
Moonpie Aristotle
2006-02-24
ch 1,
abuseI don't think you intended for this poem to make readers laugh but, it left me chuckling.

I interpreted this poem as being about a girl who has feelings for her female friend but is too insecure to let her friend know how she feels. Is this interpretation accurate?

I think the premise is very raw and personal and at the same time I find it cute and ironic to hear how good of friends the characters are yet how one can't commit herself to sharing all of her feelings with the other.

If I understand your concept and it's about you then good luck with sorting through your emotions. If this poem is fictioanl then good job capturing the cluster of feelings a girl still in the closet would feel. :)

My critique for this piece would be to develop the character's appearance to the reader.
Darcy666
2006-02-24
ch 1, anon.
abuseThis poem made me think of something, it made me smile and made me cry not many things can do that to me,keep it up.
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