This is really sad. I like how you tell a story without actually telling the details. It's very unique, I like it a lot :)

Wow... You did really well here. Good job. The Imagery is very good. It's dark but easily related to

i know the feeling. i can totally relate to this. but one word of advice: if the rhyming doesn't fit, just don't forced it. forced rhyming comes out horrible usually. nice work.

wow. that sounded really angry and sad. i guess bitter's the word. very straight-to-the-point, and quite strong. yeah...wow pretty much sums it up.

I really like this poem, the rhyming structure creates a clear sense of rhythm and pace but isn't forced. And again you you have used a lot of imagery in your poem. There is a lot of seemingly raw emotion here and you have captured the character in your poem well. Keep up the good work.