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| eraced 2007-01-21 ch 1,  | abuseNice work. i like this. You may not have been writing long, but you're a good writer. keep writing. love and blood loss.~erAced~ |
| Arafax 2006-11-22 ch 1, | abuseNice. I can relate very well. Sad I know...but true. Nice word use. Keep up the good job! And thank you so much for the review you left me. |
| angeloftheninthorder 2006-02-27 ch 1, | abuseThis sounds as if it was written from the mind of a suicidal killer. Keep up the suspenseful writing! :) |
| Moonpie Aristotle 2006-02-24 ch 1, | abuseAre u really a British chickie? That's flippin' awesome! I myself am an American gal. I read your profile and I guess your not so much of a homosexual (lol) but, more a girl with a broken heart... I find vampires are so fascinating as well, especially Vlad the Impaler. Anyway, I really enjoyed reading this poem. For someone who claims to be a beginner you sure have a good grasp of rhyme and meter. Also, you typed "remane" instead of remain, or maybe that's how you spell it. Lastly, I think you should rephrase the line "the thick red liquid closing my doors", it sounds nice but I'm not clear on what it means. Keep em' coming :) |
| mizu no kokoro 2006-02-24 ch 1, | abusei can feel the despair expressed in this piece~ good work keep writing! |
| Emma 2006-02-24 ch 1, anon. | abuseAw wow that is so good i honestly dont know how you do it, but keep it up! |
| Jonathan Kimberley 2006-02-24 ch 1, | abusedepressing like always, but powerful all the same. |