Nice work. i like this. You may not have been writing long, but you're a good writer. keep writing.



love and blood loss.~erAced~

Nice. I can relate very well. Sad I know...but true. Nice word use. Keep up the good job! And thank you so much for the review you left me.

This sounds as if it was written from the mind of a suicidal killer. Keep up the suspenseful writing! :)

Are u really a British chickie? That's flippin' awesome! I myself am an American gal. I read your profile and I guess your not so much of a homosexual (lol) but, more a girl with a broken heart... I find vampires are so fascinating as well, especially Vlad the Impaler.

Anyway, I really enjoyed reading this poem. For someone who claims to be a beginner you sure have a good grasp of rhyme and meter. Also, you typed "remane" instead of remain, or maybe that's how you spell it. Lastly, I think you should rephrase the line "the thick red liquid closing my doors", it sounds nice but I'm not clear on what it means.

Keep em' coming :)

i can feel the despair expressed in this piece~ good work

keep writing!

Aw wow that is so good i honestly dont know how you do it, but keep it up!

depressing like always, but powerful all the same.