So good! I'm a sucker for stories with winged characters. ^__^ Look forward to more of this my friend.

nice story, keep it up...

but I think it's better if they have names...

please rnr my poems too :)

fufufufufu, I am very interested in how this story turns outt! X3

I LOVE IT! Continue please! :D Great work! This is just like a daydream I had! It's nice to finally read something like this, and so good too!

UWAHH! This story is so good! I like the cofession at the end of chapter 2! Right more please!

UWAHH! So good I just want to read more!

It starts out really good! The plot goes forward very nicely, and the description is awesome.There are many unnecessary commas. Commas make one stop for a second, so don't overuse them (rather rewrite the sentences so you don't need to use comma), it can destroy the flow. Also there are some places where comma isn't needed at all."Gazing out into the vase emptiness" I think you meant vast? XD Typo... heheThere is no need to have a line break after every sentence. Line break should come when there is a change of subject. And double line breaks, lines or whatever you wish, come when the subject changes entirely, for example if you suddenly change POV, place and so on.You're good at making it exciting and want the reader to read on.