Well, I love your crazy formatting and I think you write beautifully.

Aww. I love how this fits in with the title. It's really sad and sweet. The end is cute, about keeping it all kind of secretive. I'm not sure why it strikes me as cute but it does. This whole piece is kind of cute in a different, secret, sexy kind of way... you know? Anyway I love it. Bravo. My favorite part was, "He smiles with his buttery lips when she can't decide which bruises are souvenirs of which dance."

Oh...wow. I love your formating, by the way. I kind of came across your stuff as I was developing formatting myself and so I've always found it really easy to relate to your pieces.

My favorite line: "and when she kisses him she always pretends he's rain so it's kind of alright to love him."

That's so cute and deep and sweet and sad all at the same time. I love it.

(pink tights are perfect-pretty-pure, they'll cover up dancer doll's sins and madame will never know).. That has got to be my favorite part! I love the way you format it spices things up. Keep writing!TM

because passion is just too painful - love that hon, love it all. iz xx

'buttery lips' 'peppermint tongue'... just gorgeous! personally, i prefer your old style, but this style is also amazing! great poem!

Amazing! I just love that last line... m makes the sin sweet...

i loved this. & i love your style.

Your formatting is amazing! And so is the story behind it, of course. As always.

" Her eyes surrender their tears because the music of his moans is ohsobeautiful" Gorgeous. Beautiful description.

Beautiful. I love the second stanza (paragraph?) It's gorgeous. I odn't know, it just made sense to me for some reason.

Beautiful.

moulin rougeishbut more innocent yet devilish

music of his moans is ohsobeautiful.-its pretty beautiful, isnt it?

you just made me cry. your writing, god, it's to much, it makes me want to tear my heart out so i can't feel it. I never cry when i read. Feel proud.

Mm it's an interesting feeling to be "loved like mad" by someone I don't know :P

Yes the formatting is crazy, and in places unnecessary, but in more places absolutely fucking perfect so don't change it. Writers are at their best (easily) when they embrace what comes naturally, even if nobody likes it.

Gorgeous m'dear, and the feeling is entirely mutual.

You write such beautiful pieces. I love your formatting, I love how you're so unusual. You are most definitely one of my favourite writers on here.