 True.Randomness 2007-12-20 . chapter 1A short but touching story. It held so much emotion that it made it more real than many other stories. |
 Rock on an Ocean Shore 2007-05-27 . chapter 1Great one-shot. It seemed like a bittersweet sliver of life.
I think Caden and Oliver just tried too long to live up to being the "golden couple." It's better when they accept that their relationship has flaws and try to better them.
In my opinion, you might have started the one-shot with Caden opening the door and all the thoughts that go through Oliver's head rather than with the paragraphs that describe rather than show the state of their relationship.
It's just a suggestion, really. I'm always a hypocrite when it comes to giving advice about stories. I don't follow half my own suggestions.
I've really enjoyed reading this, though. The way you described their relationship was tangible and realistic. Great job. |
 Momoro 2007-05-07 . chapter 1Man, this very nearly made me cry.
Beautifully written! |
 Katja de Wit 2007-03-13 . chapter 1That was truly amazing. :] |
 Nikkorz 2006-11-26 . chapter 1That was absolutely one of the best stories that I have ever read.
I was like bawling my eyes out, but it was so good. |
 kimper 2006-07-03 . chapter 1Beautiful. :) |
 love.strawberries 2006-05-31 . chapter 1This one hurt... But it was so beautiful... *sigh* It seems like I can't do much but sigh after reading one of your stories... |
 Zephyr Tenshi 2006-03-03 . chapter 1What an amazing story! Caden and Ollie both sound incredibly gorgeous. And silk boxers...it makes my spine tingle in the most delicious way! This story is a perfect example of when not to interupt while someone else is talking...very Erin Brockovich-esqe. Great attention to detail and fluidity. Keep up the good work!Kisses,Me |