The first stanza is absolutely lovely.

Good work.

oh my, I loved the part "I fell in love with the season of today". lol in Utah we have every season every day! lol I also loved "we practiced swimming in the snow b/c the ice is s o beautiful from below". So cool and interesting. I enver thought about looking up in the snow..very very amazing!

i was about to say, there's an author on this site with the name poetic abortion

then i saw your a.a.

"(i didn't fall in love with him) no, no i fell in love with the season of today"

i feel that line muchly

i am doing a sequel as soon as i fall out of love because i can't write violence when i'm happy

gor. geous. (your writing)

Oh wow. I absolutely love this. Gorgeous, beautiful work!

i like the last coupla lines but 2-b-honest, i dont think this is ur best. beautiful nonetheless,

~mez~

i love that first stanza. tre magnifique. (iamsocheesy)

"(I didn’t fall in love With him) No, no I fell in love with the season Of today." - lovely, lovely.

♥

the ending...oh my god, i think i just chocked on my own laughter. itwashilarious&perfect.

~* noelle

I love the beginning. Reminds of walking by the pool, while the radio played christmas songs. Good use of parantheses. I think I spelt it right.

*applauds* Classy! The minimalist and subtle rhyme really accosted me, I love it! I would assume to get completely what this is about, but what I get, I really like. My favourite bit was the first stanza,

'we practise swimming in the snow because the ice is so beautiful from below'

Wow! What a line!

Great work; the rhythm and rhyme were nicely paced and matched.

just love the first stanza... and the second. oh, and the third - i was gonna copy and paste, but it would have been the whole thing so... beautiful work! :D

"(I didn’t fall in love/With him) No, no/I fell in love with the season/Of today./"

lovely, lovely.

"Sorry Noelle."

haha, that cracked me up.

i fell in love with the first stanza. how could you not?

the whole thing feels important, to me. i have to figure this out

someday.

beautiful imagery. haha noticed the poetic abortion reference. great ideas! keep on going!

Beautiful, and the first stanza especially so. So curious about the reference to Poetic abortion.

And the last point is something I'm mulling over, it sounded like a plea almost. I've done it and recovered it and wonder now where I stand.

(loved the word philistine, not heard it since my church days. Keep up the great work)

Love the rhyming part in the first stanza. Really just added beauty to the wonderful imagery of swimming in the snow. I almost feel that instead of changed ("jackets changed for sweaters"), it should be exchanged. But I guess that probably means something specific. I love the idea of falling in love with the season and not with him. Sometimes I think that could also be possibly, then but I just remember that I'm to good at lying (to myself). Good work.