This is nice, I like the simplicity, but also how you still manage to say quite a lot. Good work.
~mAg

I really liked what you said. It was descriptive and fluent. When I read it the first time I didn't like how it was basically a sentence, but after reading it again, I realized it still flowed. Good job!

The last line really surprised me because I realize that you just described myself.

EB

I like the feeling of hopeless hope in this poem. great work. like that the word breathless is bold. good word, "graze". describes the feeling exactly

Amen.

cool poem. i love the line 'and it was almost as if you saw me' good job :)~dropsofjewpiter~

I like this a lot. Well done interpreting the whole thing.

Beautiful. Short and beautiful.

wow short and sweet. i can find the eyes watching me now. haha nice work!

This is good. I like how you run one line into another, and it is nice and angsty.

lovely work, loved it

Beautiful. I enjoyed reading this. Well done!