There's something so precise about every word in your writing that makes it so fantastic. I love it. You use repetition brilliantly.

absolutely gorgeous poem. the imagery is beyond amazing. 'sea tangled tresses' and 'soft tourmaline promises'...i've never read something so creative.

This is...wow. This is just an amazing piece of writing. I absolutely adore it!

beautifully written, your details astound me. beautiful job.

oh my god, how have i not reviewed you more? how have i not added you to my favourites list? i love this! you're awesome.

so magical and heartbreaking. your poems are always so imagerous.

Intricate description at the beginning, a cornicopia of articulate imagery, descended into raw want and insecurity, (would you look at me then?). I really like it.

i love you, this; you make the world such a beautifully bittersweet place with this poem, which is lovely and deserves so many hearts. the imagery made me squeal, like a cliche little girl with too much thought on fairytales and still cries when she watches the Little Mermaid, because she spoiled herself and read what really happened first, and, yes, the ending is painful, brutal but so anti-happy ending that i, once again, squealed like a little girl. you made me so happy reading this that i cried.

~* noelle

glitter. gorgeous imagery.

the imagery is gorgeous as always. the mermaid image is so beautiful, but i almost want to smash the image because he needs something like that to look at instead of a real girl. the ending is painful like you just squeezed out all my breath. heartbreakingly beautiful.

All of your pieces have those beautiful fairy-tale images. Your writing just speaks volumes .. it is all so heart wrenching and amazing. I love the repetition in this piece .. it ties it so nicely together.The last line is so so powerful & is just a perfect way to finish such an amazing piece.

what if i were a mermaid with stars caught in my eyelashes,-oh wow.wowowowow.amazing imagery, you made me feel underwater again today.

nice

This is so completely beautiful.

"what if i were a mermaid with stars / caught in my eyelashes, with peridot/amethyst anemone / stippling the web of my sea-tangled tresses"

Oh my, I just loved that! This poem is such a gem.

prettypretty. i heart the imagery, & the simple tone of desperation - it works together so nicely.

~kait

great poem- it has such amazing description and unique vocabulary- i love the third stanza. good job ;)~dropsofjewpiter~