Not bad, not bad at all. It was pretty brilliant too, I found myself smiling at certain lines, unsure why, but it was good. The only thing, it cuts off rather suddenly don't you think?

I really liked this poem. It had some very good imagery. I could picture the city very easily. Great job.

Hey, its Epicpoetic from deviantart. This is really good, especially for a first poem. The rhyme is great, and there were a few little twists of words 'four' instead of 'for' which is great - it makes a difference.

oh im lovin this...specially this bit:

And the grandest of buildingsStood above them allLooming over the citySneering down at others allThey all bowed downBefore their QueenThey knew who was bossOr so it would seem

love the way youv'e made the buildin to seem like a person..and a queen aswell coz people can relate to bowin down to royalty and smaller buildings...!!

so are you goin to study writing or anything? or have you study it?

xxkisses