oh god
cant explain how much this resonated
so clear and evocative
the choppiness of the last stanza like a conveyor belt
i Love it..

jesus, I can really relate to this. I'm sorry, but it has to go on my favorites.

Peace and Love

~> Lifed

i like the innocent voice in this one. nice work.

this was so sad but honest. keep writing.

Both beautifully well-written poems. (: The first one was so sad! & for the second I loved the lines "I can't seem to shake the feeling/That selfishness gets you farther." Well done. (:

this was my favrit out of the two...yet both were excellently written.

Perfect emotion-capturing. Format helps.

oh... so sad. beautifully worded, with that sudden drop of realization at the end. wonderful.

i loved this. it was so bitter and sad and just so truthful. i loved the irony in it too. this was perfect. *faves*

O.O Did it really happen? =( That's so sad, and the way you put it really did bring out the emotions well.

*wipes a tear away* that's so sad! :(

Well written poem! Really conveys emotion well! Write on; you have talent!

~Anna~