|Reviews for Ghost|
| Sercus Kaynine 6/10/07 . chapter 1
A sad, but good, poem. The rhyming was perfect. I liked it.
| MrBillyD 3/1/07 . chapter 1
You've caught the feelings of a tormented vampire just right. You should have a very good future as a writer.
| Embellished Heart 3/1/06 . chapter 1
This is really really good. Short yet powerful. Its so easy to visualise the whole thing playing workDana
| angeloftheninthorder 2/27/06 . chapter 1
Full of suspense, the words literally create blood and chocolate in my mouth. One as tastefull as the other.
P.S. Thanx for looking at my stories.
| Jonathan Kimberley 2/26/06 . chapter 1
this may be taken from a couple of different views, but to me, this sounds as if you are a vampire remembering the day you were turned.
| Oriel Vaughn 2/26/06 . chapter 1
I like the sense of rhythm in this piece. The rhyming is not bad either - quite consistent rhyming without sounding unnatural, as though you simply chucked in any word just to make it rhyme. I also liked the description of "whirlpools of a deep black ocean"; it was really good imagery :)
But punctuation-wise: may I suggest changing the first line to "A ghost of myself; is that what I see?" I think it kind of enhances the rhythm.
Keep writing! :)