You have so much to chose from to read, so I went with your poems first.The way this poem begins feels as if the reader is in for a very gray and heavy poem... and then the surprise ending, which gives it a bit of a comical edge. I loved it.

lol!! i like the ending.

where am i? You askI am

...In detention

xD why did you go to detention?

Were u actually in detention? i guessed u wrote dis from ur view/experience so u must've been in a detention...well, there's a first time to everything.. and is not dat bad!! haha.. u can't just be a good gurl in school can u? hehe.. well, the ending made me giggled abit.. never thought that would come.. haha, simple words but understandable.. u got straight to the point ^^... kk.. peace kimmy chan

I did not see that coming. Very dark to begin with, but I ended with a little giggle of relief from the tension being harboured within each paragraph. Amazingly written. Great job.