Nice. And you're absolutely right: short and bittersweet. Very good. Sorry I don't have time for a longer review, but my folks'll be home any time now and my dad will want the computer.Namarie--Smeagol Fasir Kenobi

Excellent flow and tone. The voice speaks so much more than the words in this. Well done.

THIS is amazing. Wow. I am in awe. I really really like this. Well said. thx for the review! good job!

i like this...it flows very well awesome job!

Very rythmic and perhaps even melodic. I could see this as a song, as well as a poem. Great imagery, and nice rhyming pattern.

wow this is good! its sad but very good! keep writing!

~SarahJane

wow, thats a really good poem :D sad though, good job!

hey there! *reviewing you back- plus, every good writer needs an ego boost! ^^* Non-cheesiness makes the poem work- as opposed to so many writers who throw together *dat* and *wit* and *ma boi*- geh. Despicable. But, you, you! *punches fist in air* CARRY ON! ^^`~Bella~`

Beautful. I love the combination of sadness and hope, and the inconclusive conclusion (somethings wrong with that phrase, don't ask...).

aww! this is a beautiful piece - the rhythm is perfect, it flows so well. i like the sadness in this, the angsty hopefullness. it works. great piece!