oh! Thyne! that was really impressive! i loved the part about the anyone's and the white gloves.it reminds me of a certain type of ppl that i thought i knew once upon a time...anyway b4 i go down memorylane again! good poem. this is definetly my favorite. and hey wuold u hurry up and publish that damn story!! i luvd ur poem! LOVED IT!

Very nice job. I think this is one of your best yet. It had a ton of qualities that many poems lack and that is what is making it really good! Keep on writing!

Very good, I loved it. The rhythm is good; it flows well and I liked how you used the freeverse in this poem, it's very fitting. Loved the metaphors; her foundation "falling from underneath" makes me think of a crumbling house.I loved, also, how you described them as "anyones." A very good description.Good job!

this is a great piece! i love the lines 'No one can touch her,

but he longs to' and 'she smiled with her eyes,

instead of her teeth.' this is very beautiful. i love the story in it. great job!