Wow... this person does seem somewhat stalkerish, but very much in love. You paint a very clear picture here, though some things are insinuated.

The ending does seem somewhat a suprise. When she screams his name, she is admitting that she knows him.And in your ealeir statement "you cast a glance at me" helps support that SHE might have had feelings for him, too. I like this. Faving.

It doesn't have to rhyme if it's good! It's so sad, but I like it alot.