The imagery here is beautiful and I really love the way you tell the story.. awesome piece

Most of the poems I've been reading (since before you started uploading) have been mostly not open style like this one. I forgot how open style can be beautiful as well. Powerful imagery is this one's main strength, I'd say. Meaning is direct and simple enough, without requiring much long thought or dwelling to understand- which is a good thing, really unless you were aiming to sound complicated, which really isn't the goal of writing poetry, is it? The usage of the one exclamation mark right before the end makes it just a little bit more intense before the poem itself fades out. All in all, yeah I like it. Keep up the good work. ^^

Lol, it's been a long time since i've last seen this format from you. Anyways, it's very melancholic if i may say so. Awesome in its melancholic-ness of it. Lol ah well. I can relate i guess.

I love the images. More poems here need that skill.

Your imagery in this is just superb. I loved how you described the scene a lot, and the ending (most likely the last paragraph) was simply beautiful. Excellent.