Cool! Cool! I realy really liek it! hm I think it could be called "Sword dance" or something to that effect... but that kinda sounds a little cheesy... Can see why it's untitled. But O o O o O it's really awesome.

what a perfect poem...FOR ME TO ** ON!

yes i do!, lol i like the word choice in this one and i can relate to this i like swords.

Sheerly beautiful. Again, I feel this one. Very visceral and yet intellectual.

I like the journey you take the reader on: Dance, to Swordplay, to a subject, to Poetry.

Effective use of the word "boy" everysooften, and just enough not to ruin it. Constant register, and lovely imagery.

Nice poem! :)

Oh my. This was really really well done. Bravo to you. Everything was just perfect, from the gorgeous imagery to the powerful emotion of the mixture that is lust and love. Beautiful.

Hey...i really really liked this coz i can relate to this...i dunno wot else to say really, other than it is a great piece of writing..^_^ revierw me sumtiem^_^