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| Frightfully Unaware 2008-05-02 ch 15,  | abuseI really love this story. I think it's well written and the plot is very interesting. I just wish you would update!--but then, you probably get a lot of these random reviews. |
| Ryu 2008-02-11 ch 15, anon. | abusePlease update this story, itès very good. and dos shiro find out who Youko is in the next chapter. |
| Time of Birth 11.58 PM 2007-09-11 ch 15, | abusei just love this story! |
| dani 2007-04-10 ch 15, anon. | abuseWonderful, as usual. I hope you will update soon, but only when you are able. *I do hope it is soon though. :) |
| Toyotomi Koto 2007-04-10 ch 15, | abuseYou have been a busy little beaver. It is a very nice chapter, glad to see some of my influence in there, love that you take suggestions. Really, I love the chapter and hope the next update comes quicker. I think the only constructive criticism might be to add a bit more imagery, other then that, the work is really good. |
| little fox demon 2007-04-07 ch 15, | abuseo finally u worked on it i was so supprised when i saw well at least i know theyre alive kep itup |
| Chesca Ellen 2007-04-07 ch 15, | abuseGetting better and better! Update again soon. Franny |
| Chesca Ellen 2007-04-07 ch 12, | abuseReally really good so far! You've obviously put a lot of work into it, and it's paid off! I've not read it all yet, will finish it later, so expect another review! Keep it up, Franny |
| Toyotomi Koto 2007-01-07 ch 14, | abuseHey, I am very happy to see a new chapter up! It was good, I really enjoyed it. I think the only comment I have is that it had a filler feel to it, but I don't think the 'break' so to speak was a negative. I also caution you about rushing scenes. The typhoon scene felt like you rushed it, and it might benefit with a few more adjectives. Then again, I use adjectives like a druggy uses pills, so that you don't need to pay any mind to too seriously. Again, loved it! |
| Guest 2007-01-07 ch 14, anon. | abuseAn interesting story with good character development. I'd be careful with the use of 'modern' words, such as 'shiner' for more period authenticity overall, a good story |
| dani 2007-01-05 ch 14, anon. | abuseIt was very good, but not nearly enough. Please update quickly! :) |
| dani 2006-12-15 ch 13, anon. | abuseVery, very good. Please...please! Continue to write this story! |
| Toyotomi Koto 2006-12-12 ch 13, | abuseHello, I finished reading the story the second night after you showed it to me. I have really enjoyed reading it. I know you said you wanted to tell me something about the temple or something but you left before I could talk to you in person. I had a queston, not related exactly to this chapter but still. the second night Youko and Shiro slept near each other, they woke up in the morning laying together. Youko got mad, very understandable, but Shiro said something about samurai being okay or normally homosexual. Then the chapter before this, I thik it was anyway, Shiro thinks to himself that he cannot be gay. I was wondering about the apperent change of mind, or was i Shiro wasn't thinking about how he felt about it when Youko punched him for having his arm over her when she woke up? Anyway, wonderful story, I cannot wait to read more. Have a good christmas break -Robin |
| dani 2006-10-22 ch 12, anon. | abuseHey, thanks for updating again! I think you are doing a wonderful job and I hope you keep up on this story, it's too good to quit updating on. |
| JT FAN 2006-10-09 ch 11, anon. | abusei think this is a great story! please update soon. |