"And it made her cry, thinking/ She had no one to hold onto..." I also liked everything after "Darkness creeping in..." good job.

~shadow

I really liked this poem. I think you make good use of grammar i.e.'And it made her cry, thinking, ' Forces a pause that makes the reader think as well. Liked the ending as well the ... is v effective. Well done!

This is an awesome poem, but I think it would be better if you left the ... off the end of it. It would make it seem more final, and it would be stronger if you left it at just one period.

But, that's the author's choice. Maybe you had something different in mind..

~dragonzz~

A poem with a poignant message, I like it. The persecution of others is often unintentional as far as the consequences extend. Well done for writing this.