You are good at this! PLEASE continue this one!

Whoa ohh my gosh I guess be careful what you wish for because you just might get it man she is vampire fanactic great chapter even
Keep it up :)

haha. kenneth sounds cute :)

Heh I like this story a lot so far. Have you read the Vampire Kisses series?!? I love those books!

i love it write more

Nice, though you could describe the charectors abit more, it would help us reader visualize them. And you're not continueing? (Pouts, then sighs) Oh well. I'll get over it...lol! Srry, Drama Qween= ME!!

VERY nice beginning!! GO VAMPIRES lol!!

xD i am totally a sucker when it comes to vampire stories...please keep updating!!

Update soon

uh oh that's not good for lilina! lol This story is very very interesting and I really hope you continue it! You're doing an awsome job so you shouldn't stop, just try making them longer! lol I guess that's what everyone says though!

It's like a little trip to extacy, something dark and seductive we know we should not go. Something about this story tugs at the heart strings of human nature.

ah! you cant just leave me hanging out there! its...its...ILLEGAL!please please please update this as soon as humanly possible!...no pun intended...ha ha...but really! this is great and i need more!

Great story you got here! I can't wait until the next chapter!

yay, new chappie. it wasn't as bad as you thought it was...but it definitely could use some improvement. like more description. i still am enjoying it thouhg...you know me, anything involving vampires...

fyrefaerie

Nice job, yes i do agree this was way to short, more details are needed to help with making Lilina's motive and what she feels more convincible.