Nice. This is really good. You're real talented when it comes to writing.

sad..but the rhyme scheme in this worked out very well. (i can't rhyme) I think that the first paragraph was my fav. Keep it up!

I love this. It's very tragic, but the rhymes make it dance almost. Very nice, and a wonderful theme. Keep up the good work.

good theme. critical sorry: the rhythm can get awkward. if it's meant like that then it's ok, but it's a little broken at times. yay for banana, she wrote poetry! love u. good poem