I would like this better without the last two lines.

But still a wonderful sentiment...

"Maybe its time we grew up together" has such an air of "forever" to it. Lovely!

lol anything i say, you would hv alr have heard. for example,'cute, "aw!", beautiful, sweet, etc, etc,'. but anyway, i like the first three lines. they flow well. perhaps you could have made this poem into a three-line verse thing if you wanted, but i like this one still. and i love the last two lines.

and i think this is SO COMPLETELY WEIRDLY COINCIDETAL. i mentioned you to my friend and told him to go check you out. and kester went, 'omg! i know that guy! he's in my class!' lol. something along those lines. cool, isnt it?

bah, screw cute.. this is brilliant, good job!

"but your beauty got in the way."

very, very interesting line. i love the aura of intrigue that pervades the poem.

Okay, everyone ready? On the count of three, we'll release one loud, collective "Aw!" One ... two ... three ... AW! :-D Oh, and ... thanks for reviewing my poem thingy.

'Maybe its about timewe grew up together,maybe then I could get used to you.Oh to get used to you,I could fall in love all over again.'

What fantastic lines. Kind of reminds me of a bit in the Lovely Bones(don't kow if you've read it). I think this has a certain truth in it about love, which gives it a depth and lovely thoughtful dreamy quality. Great!

Very cool-- I especially like the beginning-- "I was stargazing, hoping to notice something." It flows.

I've already got this down as a favourite on my other account, but i just wanted to say happi birthdae! now you can finally drive, and get speeding tickets :) congrads =P

so sweet! i muchly enjoyed reading this, very nice and pretty, well done

amazing poem, i adore it. very lovely, keep writing.~

this is really cute

Pretty and softly morbid, lovely combination.

oh this is so cute! i love it, it is just perfect the way it is!

Monkey