 kissxinxthexrain 2006-03-01 . chapter 1Pretty good, but it was short. You should try making it more descriptive! I know you can do it! Also, your paragraphs are cluttered up witn quotation marks and dialogue. Try doing it like this-
"Wow! You should try it like this!"
"I agree! It can really help clear up your writing!"
See? :) But keep writing! |