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goddessofvampires118 2006-06-12 . chapter 1
same thing I said all the others good job keep going
kissxinxthexrain 2006-03-01 . chapter 1
Pretty good, but it was short. You should try making it more descriptive! I know you can do it! Also, your paragraphs are cluttered up witn quotation marks and dialogue. Try doing it like this-

"Wow! You should try it like this!"

"I agree! It can really help clear up your writing!"

See? :) But keep writing!
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