0.0 OMG
I actually did say that out loud...it ended so abruptly, it's borderline scary...I really love it btw...

Great story! but the ending was too fast...I would like a side story with these two pairs!

Great story! besides some grammar stuff and the abrupt ending it was really good.

Why'd you stop? Great story! The flashbacks were confusing, could you label them if tyou continue, italiscize them or something. Its a great story just a bit difficult to follow.

yay

Wow, this is really good. A bit confusing at first, but still. ^_^ very good, please continue!

First I would like to say... wow. This is long.

Second... wow. This is good.

Third... wow. You need to update!

Heh, I'm repetitive.

Anyway, I'm not really sure exactly why, but I readlly like Sounou. He's not my typical favourite character, but still...

I also really like Reef. I hope he catches the assassin and I hope you write about that because it would be really interesting.

Wouldn't it be interesting if the assassin was actually someone he knew or was close to? Like maybe Ryjid?

...

Nah.

But like I said, update soon!

♥'s and X-Rated Thoughts-- Luci-chan

i like it i love it i want some more of it! ^^ update soon

*Finally* fictionpress is letting me review! The Darcia are fascinating. I adore Sounou, even though I feel bad for him.

The warlord's background is equally tragic.

This is an excellent beginning to a very interesting tale. The Darcia fascinate me, I'm sure that everyone has, at one point, wanted to change into someone else. Sounou's very smart and I can't wait to see how well his plan goes.

My only complaint is that your switching from present to past and vice versa isn't indicated well, at least to me. I got it about halfway through, but until then I was confused. Perhaps if you put a little legend at the beginning of each chapter, no one (or at least me) will be confused.

Other than that, everything's great and I will be awaiting the second chapter.