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| TeaWithOnions 2006-07-24 ch 1,  | abuseGorgous, simply gourgous The imagery is beautiful, and I love the idea of raindrop wings... I might get me a pair! (yee-haw) |
| Sweet Lunacy 2006-06-21 ch 1, | abuseWow, that was very powerful and moving...I enjoyed it. |
| ADSpencer 2006-05-08 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful work! This is wonderful... |
| Katterree Fengari 2006-05-06 ch 1, | abusecurious. I like the imagery...pretty poem |
| rrmehta364 2006-04-18 ch 1, | abuseGreat poem. I don't normally like freeverse poetry, but you're pretty good. "Maybe I’m just too human. Or maybe you’re just someone else’s angel." : I really liked those lines. |
| authordream4life 2006-04-15 ch 1, | abusethis was a very moving poem, and I loved it. I've read a lot of poems on here, and I'm serious, I haven't read one this good in a while. |
| The Melissa Occult 2006-04-04 ch 1, | abuseConstructive criticism? alright I'll try... Some of the lines seemed empty, like they were unimportant and didn't mean anything. Some lines caught my eye though, such as raindrop wings and clover kissed wishes. Makes me think of olde ireland. heh, not a bad thing. also the ending made me think of a song by 'They might be giants' something like "she's an angel". Personally when you said washes hearts from your sleeves at the beginning, I was hoping for flowers and not hearts. Flowers make anything look pretty, but the heart is just a quivering bloody mass of tissue. anywho, email me if you want, I'd also like some CC on my 'stabat spiritum' (or spiritus? I don't know latin very well) Sorry for the horrid grammer in this review, I'm a little rushed (sh... don't tell anyone, but I haven't written my english paper yet like I said I would...) hugs,EIB |
| Anaare 2006-04-03 ch 1, | abuseGreat poem, which I really enjoyed reading. Excellent work! |
| in theory 2006-03-28 ch 1, | abuseTo be constructive, I thought the line "in a chaotic world of tears" was a little mediocre compared to some of the fabulous metaphors, "raindrop wings" is especially pretty. Other than maybe jazzing that up, I can't think of anything else :) nice work |
| the Stranger in the moonlig... 2006-03-18 ch 1, | abuseBreathtaking, literally. Apparently I was holding my breath and released after this, but not to my knowledge. Well there is my action of Randomology today other then emailing you I guess. Talk later. Keep writing great job as usual. Keep wrting poetry and I will so definately keep reading. Sincerely, the Stranger in the moonlight. |
| Rachel Peterson 2006-03-18 ch 1, | abuseAgain, beautiful! : ) It brings a nice image to mind, clarity and beauty. |
| Drops of Jewpiter 2006-03-15 ch 1, | abusegreat poem. you have such an orignal, descriptive writing style. i love your work~dropsofjewpiter~ |
| andXso SheXpulled theXTrigg... 2006-03-06 ch 1, | abuseWow. Amazing. |
| sloppy firsts 2006-03-05 ch 1, | abuseo very nice phrases in this. Really liked 'Hearts from your sleeves' because it reminds me of that wearing your heart on your sleeve metaphor. I smiled when i saw the word chaotic btw ;) love the line 'clover kissed wishes' it has a nice ring to it. Keep up the good work! |
| Autumn Dance 2006-03-02 ch 1, | abuseHey cutie...Nice to see a new poem in your name. I have to say I do like it, but i'm not in the mood for poetry. I dunno- I was reading this and it felt quite bitter. Don't take that to be a slander against you, it's just the way I read and interpreted it. It just felt too-"Oh i've read this before" kind of poem. I dunno- hard to understand. But good all the same. x |