I admire the simple, clean beauty of the unpunctuated stanzas. It fits together like a modernised jigsaw, one with no need for connections.

wow. wonderful. i liked this, the feeling of it, the excitement (and hell, i wanna go to amsterdam, too).

the long stanza is gorgeous & the whole poem so infectious in its idealistic, bohemian exuberance

'fish swim out of design' love the originality in this

Oh. That is awesome. I went there for one day once. Didn't get to do any of the fun stuff.

wow...this is gorgeous. And so unusual. The contrast between the two characters is really interesting and almost humorous, but sweet too. I love the sixth stanza - it's so lyrical and just plain beautiful. Romance meets everyday. Great work.

Cool peom. I like it because I'm drinking green tea right now!!

humorous and delightful.

~* noelle

The semi-humour is brilliant. Really.

And thanks for all the reviews! And I just turned 16 on Monday. Got to update my profile...

Aah! amsterdam..."planning weeks of decedence." oh yes. surreal images. (maybe the brownies?) full of energy. - haberdasher