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| greenGalilee 2006-12-25 ch 1,  | abuseI like the voice of this poem. and the use of the parentheses works very well. Good work. |
| poet tree 2006-05-01 ch 1, | abusemakes me feel wistful and long for a rainy day middle verse is beautiful - what a beautiful way to make me envision the rain so did you find out what s&m was or what? (hallucinations are swell for the soul) you make me type longer reviews than i usually do. |
| the naked civil servant 2006-03-29 ch 1, | abusei am in incandescent awe |
| The Melissa Occult 2006-03-24 ch 1, | abuseI love the rain. Rainy days are happy days!I'm bored right now but I can't think of anything to say. It's one of those bored times when you just want to be with someone for the sake of being. I exist, therefore I exist. ( |
| W3DNESDAY 2006-03-07 ch 1, | abusehey wow, this is really great. i like the innovative structure and the imagery. you carried out all the alliteration really well. this poem would sound great when read aloud. i think it has a dashboard confessional / brand new kind of emo-ness to it that I love. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-03-07 ch 1, | abuseI love how you begin certain lines like "mouth sang" and love the alliteration "sterilized symphonies" |
| in theory 2006-03-07 ch 1, | abuse(yes I see what you mean about the sea seeping its way into more or less anything). apologetically pills spoke to me especially. And hope(lessness) wrapped around me. I love the isolation of "me" it implodes so subtly. I need to find more adjectives to describe you and your work, perfect is overrated and rarely true, so I'll settle for practically. |
| mizu no kokoro 2006-03-05 ch 1, | abuserain inspires the soul~ lovely work keep writing! |
| FunkyFlower17 2006-03-05 ch 1, | abusegreat poem. i loved the beginning verses especially. sorry i havent been reviewing lately, i've had sum problems at home. awesome as always and going on my favs, keep writing, ~mez~ |
| none of burt's beeswax 2006-03-04 ch 1, | abuseVery depressing. But I guess that's due to the rain. I loved "sterlized symphonies" & "we're home free and home sick (of me." Good work. |
| mercury.love 2006-03-04 ch 1, | abuseVery cold and sad. It reminds me of January and February because that's always how I feel during those months. This is lovely, of course. |
| poetic abortion 2006-03-04 ch 1, | abusei love that second stanza so much, it is so lovely. pretty, pretty, pretty in that 'beautiful' way. ~* noelle |
| faking closure 2006-03-04 ch 1, | abusem this poem is really pretty, it would go perfectly with this new song im playing, hehe. by debussy, called dr. gradus ad parnassum. yes. it matches. cept the woman who plays it on the cd doesnt do it expressivly enough. wow im ranting. yea, i really like this poem. specially the last few lines, 'with all these four-day forecasts, bled to the mouth sang, sunshine today (but the clouds suited it better) All we got Was rain.' i love quoting like half of the person's poem :D Saw II was good when you're only hearing whats going on ;D --Nomisili |
| classic violet 2006-03-03 ch 1, | abuseOh, I love it! Great job. This is truly elegant. |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-03-03 ch 1, | abuseThe sound in this jumps out so well. "No music tonight(rain is my melody)", is such a tenderly wonderful line. This whole thing creates a marvelous feeling. Excellent work. |