you have a wonderful style. The only issue is that it's hard to read aloud.. too many syllables, I think. That lends itself well to the content, though; Damnation deserves complexity. The vocabulary is well chosen, too. Keep it up :)

As an aside, I suppose; your review of 'the grey painting' was much apprectiated. Everything you mentioned was correct (well done :) ), based on one of the possible interpretations; that poem was designed to be ambiguous.

(originally it was about myself and a few friends at a party.. and staying around even though we'd be 'damned' by our parents(or hangovers)the next morning. The ideas you mentioned were.. later additions.)

A very interesting poem, with an even more interesting word choice. Well done.

I like the motion in your word choice in this work. Most of the phrases create action, which adds greatly to the imagery. Very bold pronouncements, but they fit the overall theme well and become relatable to the reader with the detail involved. Well written, because it is so visual and specific.

Ouch! Thx for the very nasty review but that don't mean i'm offended... Your poems are very good honestly and I do have more to learn perhaps by reading some of urs could make me improve it all... I've only started writing 2 yrs ago so I know im not very good. To have an author like u bashing n flaming my writing would only encourage me to write more and hopefully better.. thanks! :)

I adore the second-last line, it made the poem complete, and you are a very good poet, thus I am adding you to my favourites list. -bows-