wow, I was so totally not expecting that sort of ending.

its so sad how strict and unforgiving society rules were/can be about love, and how duty takes precedence over everything

im really enjoying reading your work, the first I read was unrelenting memories someone had favourited and I've been working my way up your list... you write really catchy poetry (as in catches the imagination)

never stop writing
(>^) Eleri (^

Er. Well. I guess you did put up a warning that the ending was rushed, so I won't comment on it. The rest of this was decent with potential to be a tear-jerker if brushed up.

"He would be torn from me, from my body, from my heart. All for the sake of a kingdom that would never return my love." - Lovely nuggest of insight. I'd love to see this point explored more. Duty versus desire. A king's responsibility to his people versus a man's personal life and love. Always a fun topic to probe into.

The beginning is a great hook. :)

Wow... Here I was wishing for a happy ending... Sucks for me. I laughed so hard when I found out he turned the adviser into a bunny! That compensates for how long I felt depressed at the end of the story. Great work.

Great story, great writing, But why couldn't he have just left the Kingdom. Now I'm off to cry.

Aww. Very sad. Interesting...but sad.

It started out with him changing an advisor into a bunny and ended with him jumping off of a balcony. That is really, really depressing.It was a good story though.

Well. That was cruel.

heh

I feel slightly depressed now.

I understand where Tobias was coming from but still...Kien loved him... :( Ah...tragic.

:(

xox

And i was expecting a somewhat happy ending...kinda surprised me. I was like, "ah" in the beginning and when i scrolled down to read more, the "ahh" eventually turned into a, "What?"

*shruggs* it was good anyways, as sad as it is...