Nice way of ending. I LOVED IT!

I loved this short story. you had me stuck yo every word. this is actually the first story i read on this website with a sex scene in it. I'd love to read that novel of yours.

i loved this story, sad as it was. Ariel was wonderful, i loved his thought processes/emotions. wonderful work, wishing i could read your book right now. keep up the beautiful work,

honorata

wow, beautifully done. i have only enough time to review this first chapter yet, but already i am drawn into this story. the characters are quite vivid, as is the description, very melancholy in a wonderful way. i look forward to reading the rest of this,

honorata

Good opening, albeit a bit slow, but it gets to the (i think it should be) heart of the matter quickly enough. Tone and voice works, since i'd say you are setting up for a sad, story, right? I think you should update quickly. Keep it up!