wow that was so incredible good...yeah thats all i got:]

This is a cute story. Mrs. Marsh is especially fantastic, though Ariel strikes me as a close second fave character. Delightful!

Wow. Jeremiah, Val, and Ryan are just like three of my friends. Ryan's like Matt who is a homophobic ** XD Val is like his boyfriend Jack who's girly and perky and cute and Jeremiah's like Alex who is Jack's friend but who likes Matt. Crazy.

I like Ariel. I want to have sex with her. Actually I just likeher.

Wow, this is updated too. I don't know how I saw the other one and missed this one...

'Nother great chapter. I was wondering of Ryan/Val is going to be the main pairing of this one (It seems so, doesn't it?), but I guess I'll really just have to wait to find out. I'm a little slow...

Aww! That wasn't yuck! That was yay! I've been waiting and waiting for a new chappie. Because I love Val so much.

I like Jerimiah... though I imagined him being far more annoying. Anyway. Good job! Keep going!

Val seems so young and vulnerable. I like him. I want him. :(

Pshaw...don't know why I said pshaw.

Mr. S...I wish I had one of those things. I wish I had a Ryan too...but I suppose I'd have to grow a ** first. Damn.

Can't wait to see what kind of trouble Jeremiah's going to be.

Love xox

ooh, i like where this is going. o.O i suspect jeremiah shall not make it too far into the story without "mysteriously" losing his pants somewhere along the way...

thank you for the reviews! ^^

'Nother nice chap. I'm still waiting to hear more about their elusive pasts. I've been writing sucky reviews lately, and, sorry, this one doesn't seem to have broken the mold. Still, update soon!

Christian schools rock especially when atleast a quarter (if not half) of the boys in ur senior class are gay, bi or curious! I swear in 03 the guys dated more guys than the girls did...

Anywauy good story so far I look forward to reading more.

Your writing is pleasurable to read. I love opening my inbox and seeing your author alert there.

I was surprised you didn't have an ending in mind already. It seems so well planned... maybe that just testifies to your skills!

Anyway. I've never been to a Christian school, public system my whole life. So I guess I can't comment on the community you present. Though, it seems understandable. Being a Christian myself, I always thought that private schools were a stupid idea, Christians should be able to deal with the public system. There's no reason to hide in a private atmosphere.

Anyway. You made me curious, are Christian schools really like this? Everyone seems so judgemental and arrogant, and that describes about 3% of the Christians I know. Then again... only the judgemental arrogant ones would want to go to a private school anyway right? So it all seems logical.

I have a lot of questions about the characters' pasts... but I'll just wait and see for that.

Where are they geographically? I assume USA... but do you have a specific place in mind? What year is it? Like, present day? 2006?

Where does Val live relative to Ryan? And where is Avery, geographically?

I loved Mrs. M, the way Ryan reacted to her was an excellent use of foil. You didn't need to tell me a thing about her personality in order for me to understand her character.

"and most certainly interested in seeing the inside of my eyelids" your writing is amazingly witty. Those little comments inserted all over the place make it even more enjoyable.

Ariel the acrobat, Victor the pervert, and Jeremiah the tardy winking guy... what a crew. They should all become friends HAHAHAHA! Just kidding.

Love it, great work!

Religious schools must burn. Unless you like yours. I suppose.

Wow. I actually took the time to read through and pronounce the "Schloofledudelkinslekoon" thing. Then half way through the name a friend IMed me and I got mad and had to start over. Anyway.

Val is so sweet and cute. I just wanted to hug and squeeze him.

Ha. The other day I was talking to my friend on the phone and he had to go to a different religious school 'cause he got kicked out of the one I go to...And he was reading the new place's application and I kept answering the questions with really un-christianly answers and what not...so I was laughing and smiling and remembering and what not when I read this. My friends and I have a saying when ever anyone says that passage about "if a man lies with a man as he does with a woman" or whatever... the saying is "** god; ** the bible" Amen. Wow. I don't have an attitude problem...I hope I'm not scaring or offending you...anyway...if I am just slap me. This review is long. I'll go now.

Love xox

Yay, update! Tenses were perfect, good job! My head really hurts, but it was a good chapter! Trust me on that one! I'm doing a bunch of exclamation marks so I hopefully don't sound as deflated as I feel! Can't wait for more!

E!! How soon?! Sooner than later?! Really soon!? Soon enough!? Ahh, going out of my mind!

Potential! Potential! Potential!

This story has SO MUCH Potential it is shouting the word with every paragraph you write! I've never been so intrigued by a set of characters. Ryan and Val seem so real, Val's upset is tangible. I felt Ryan's concern for him in my chest while I was reading. And it was absolutely beautiful.

Do you already have an ending in mind? You seem to be culminating things beyond what one normally finds on this website. There's so much you could do with this story.

The part when Ryan answers the last three questions was very well done. He seems to come off as an ** (aside from his affection towards Val, etc.) But when he answered those questions, and there was that glimmer of reluctance... that's where the potential of this story was screaming at me. You could do so much with him! Character development seems to be your strong point and I'm so excited to read on!

To see them grow... and find out why Val is so upset! I'm excited!

Great job on describing the library. I was happy to have a setting to grasp finally.

"the little Christian saints" , lol.At first, I was offended by his attitude there, but then I realized that your character Ryan WANTS to be offensive. And so instead I applaud you! Great job! He's so real!

this is so sweet, I love it! Great work.