This is temptation at its root. This poem is incredible because it encomapasses a feeling everyone has had at one time or another - the desire to rebel and fall for the excitment of evil rather than the predictability of good. I could completely envision this scene taking place, just wonderful! As I read through your stuff I keep getting more blown away with each one!

"as we twist and twirl on tiptoes"...nice use of sound device...and nice erotic lines too...very clever of you...you did a good job...

truly yours...

...I am speechless. The description gives me a disturbing vivid picture of the mind. But i admit I do like it. You have a very good style in writing poems.

All the best in your next poems, Dani

Amazingly powerful and moving. The imagery is amazing, powerfull and breathtaking. but dont give up on love...the ** tears lead to the best parts.

love it!

~xoxo~

If love hurts so much as that poem made me feel (the imagery, everything, is so beautiful), yes it's not worth it.

This is... grotesque. But beautiful. I love your imagery, and the lines

"as God condemned me for being a sinnereven though I spend every night on my knees"

and

"(you never gave me substanceand I always love the taste of sin)"

Definitly going in my favorites.

This is remarkabley beautiful. Oh, I love it! This is so gorgeous! Keep writing!

& I kind of know how you feel about love. It does hurt. I hope you're going to be ok.

Purely heartbreaking and tragic. As many say misery is a muse and you proved the theory correct. Love is definitely not as beautiful and perfect as fairy tales portray it as..

So..filled...with pain and gritty acceptance of just how painful everything can be, if there is an abundance. Almost made me cry- actually, a very difficult thing to do. Desperately good, best poetry I've read all week- it's all about the feeling.`~Bella~`