This is really good

a bitter sort of humor at the end, i like this, please write more!

sorry for the noobish typing; i guess i'm getting lazy after writing my poems like that.

My only complaint is your use of the word 'orbs,' which, due to its overuse on fictionpress, has become one of my least favorite words. Ever. At least you didn't use as a substitute for 'eyes.'

Egh. other than that, it's quite good.