This is intense, to say the least. The ending is so dark and brutal in a way that, normally, I wouldn't appreciate. I thought it worked really well, though. It's intriguing to the point where I want the backstory.

WHOA! no kidding? wow that was pretty intense. i saw that you're doing NANOWRIMO? Are you done? I tried... i'm not sure i can make it this year...

its interestingly sad.

but i really realy like it.

That was scary, morbid, beautiful, and sexy, all wrapped up in one story. ^_^ Your main character was a little...strange... but I liked it nonetheless.

love xox

It's strange how perfect this all came together. I mean the ending is so powerful, the way you painted this sorrowful picture of longing and regret. Then comes the long lasting fulfilment of this struggling desires, only to realize the gritty truth of her actions. I have to say this is an excellent story for your ficst femslash. You have a LOT of talent for atmosphere and emotion, keep up the excellent work.

Interesting. Very interesting. I love the way it ended. I love the emotion (and lackthereof).

Very well done. =D

I am completely speechless. You did an amazing job on this story, and as it reached the end I only longed for more. Beautiful just beautiful! I can't find any other words to describe this. The ending was a perfect touch and my heart felt every emotion.

AMAZING!-Paradigm's Lament

Wow, that's cold; but good.

I don't think there's any more to be said.

Alan.