Hey Cecy, it's me Regina. See, I told you I'd get around to reading your story. :-p

Ok, first of all, I like the premise of it, the boarding school, girl moves to a new and unfamiliar environment and the drama that results. I also like that she isn't a total outcast, that she does make some fun friends at the beginning instead of being a loner.

A few things you might want to consider: developing your story a little more and slowing down. Of course as writers we want to get to all the good parts, but it's also really important to slow down and really take in all the details: more actions and dialogue would improve the story leaps and bounds and make the fun parts to write even better.

More descriptions would also be great too. Kim is a sarcastic and witty girl: use that to describe even more of what's going on around her and create amusing social commentary. I loved the description of Marion has a "barbie doll gone wrong" (or something to that effect), and you should definitely put a lot more of that in because it's great.

Other than that, I'm excited to see how all the drama will play out with Marion, Jordan and Jesse. Marion and that Jordan kid are total and complete ** though, and it'll be interesting to see how or why they got that way and whether or not they have any redeeming qualities.

Happy writing!

Interesting story, I lok forward to seeing what happens next.

This sound like a fun story. But dude, I know you can do better than "The headmaster was old." The sentance like it is might have worked well in some other spot, but I think a less straight-forward description of his age might snag more of the reader's attention right at the beginning of the chapter. Otherwise its a good story and I look forward to reading more.

Youve got to update this story is realy good!

I like boarding school stories. They always are so weird. (That's a good thing!)

I like the story so far. Kim's snippy and I like that. There is one part that's confuzzling me: is Kim's last name Jaysen or Johnson. At first it was the former then it was the latter and then back to the former. It was very confusing...And it seems unlikey that a guy would punch a girl so I'm guessing this Jordan guy is a real **.