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| gabriellafaith 2007-01-14 ch 1,  | abuseUm. ew. that was pretty gross. very vivid, very...graphic...*shudders* ew gross. lol In a strange way, though...I kinda liked it...I think? lol |
| the.pink.life 2006-05-13 ch 1, | abuseWell, that was...vivid. Thank you for that wonderful mental picture. (That was sarcasm, BTW.) I'm a little disturbed by this. It's weird. Though I'm going to have that image of a brain looking like egg yolk in my mind all day now. Once again, thank you for that image. Keep writing! :) |
| Autumn Dance 2006-05-02 ch 1, | abuseI dunno about this- See for me it's just feels kinda jerky like out of sync. I dunno. It's well done for what it is but it's just too knda "I've heard this before". I will keep reading...x |
| BenevolentShadow 2006-04-26 ch 1, | abuseOdd. Your right this is definetly rambling... but in this rambling can be very good and interesting. (a bit morbid too) I like it alot, which is why I'm concerned about my mental health. ^_^ L. Shandow |
| wolfeh 2006-04-24 ch 1, | abusewow. really... wow. i cant find a word to describe it! ~wolfeh (4.36 in the pm) |
| midnightcircus84 2006-04-12 ch 1, | abuseOther than the spelling mistakes, it was excellent! |
| BlueDannyLew 2006-04-12 ch 1, | abuseVery intense! I'm still wondering if the whole thing was a complete metaphor or not. To me this illustrates rage...or someone with a badass tantrum! A tantrum of a child who didn't get what he wanted and took his anger out on everything. But I was really thrown back at the very end when I read the random questions that seemed so out of place. Makes me wonder if the person exploding had lost their mind and suddenly became something new... |
| xCorix 2006-04-01 ch 1, | abusequite interesting, very vivid! odd as it is, i like it. |
| Smoky Bear 2006-04-01 ch 1, | abuserandom freeflow stream of conciousness goin' on here. spot on... i'll even excuse the spelling, lol... |
| GerardYuroshi 2006-03-31 ch 1, | abuseYou are...ONE CRAZY BLUEBERRY MUFFIN! YAY I WIN! One trip to Las Vegas for me WOOHOO! Nice weird, odd, cool,uh...story thingy! Very random...Myes Gerry likes random things. MWHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! |
| joe dead 2006-03-29 ch 1, anon. | abusei knows you a freakin idgit. why do you want to take your eye out. kinda stupid. it's like "ah the pain!" just to look at your eye. seriously k, you got problems |
| jainen-black 2006-03-13 ch 1, | abusePretty good reminds me sorta of a rant or of The used I'm a fake. I like keep writing.:) |
| Ahemait 2006-03-06 ch 1, | abusevivid, thats for sure. but thats okay. its not relaly poetry, unless if you put it in poem form, but i get it, nonetheless. and -screams- your favorite book is tithe?! is taht the one by holly black cuz if it is...! |