are you kidding me? that's the ending?! i'm sad... this story's kind of intense so i'm wondering why the genre is humour... but it was pretty cool so i don't really care.

=]

Oh dear lord, I wrote a screenplay almost exactly like this chapter. Well, without the bet and the using-the-girl-to-get-to-the-blonde plot, but Rich Entitled Guy did start talking to Bitter Hard-Working Girl only to discover they went to the same high school. And they snarked. And ultimately realised they misjudged each other and agreed to go out. How sad for me to discover I have zero original thought. *blue*

Sweet story. :D

wow. you are a very talented writer. all of your characters so far are more than static. bravo.

This is a gorgeous story. I really love it. You have some very real characters. The ending was perfect.

Awesome writing. I really enjoyed the way you dealt with the characters psychologically--they are so influenced by their cultural and political backgrounds yet ultimately are able to break free of their inhibitions. Very Fitzgerald-esque. And I totally agree with you on the state of literature today...I despise Da Vinci Code and I can't stand Harry Potter, or his fans. I look forward to reading your other stories. :]

alright, is this turning into some twisted love square? cuz i'm seriously writhing on my couch wanting to know what happens without skipping chapters... arggh!

I dig your story, but you seem to have abandoned it. Which is fair enough, but it makes me a touch sad.

Luke ** me off, he is a giant cliche of unoriginality, but I like Vanessa. She's real and believable.

If you even read this keep writing because you've got a lot of talent.

Great story

Wow, she's really fiesty

DUDE. How freaking long does it take you to write a conversation between Luke&V?! I'd take like 2 days to write each response. They're so effing witty.

She fell in love with T.S. Eliot after reading Prufrock. When she found out on the following day that her entire Literature class loved it as well, she felt a deep, angry, sorrowful resentment. She'd rather it had never been written, than the property of the horrible common monstrous masses and their idiotic good-natured and ultimately disgusting opinions.

TOTALLY know what is meant by that. I LOVED how you described that concept.



"gawdy is the word you're looking for" 98% sure that you meant gaudy.

The Berry story is so sad. =[

Adding to fave stories. Too lazy to copy/paste the story ID yadda yadda yadda.

perfect. this was awesome. your writing is flawless and your ideas...wow. everything is great. your characters were perfect in all their imperfections. fantastic work.

+ favourites.

Wow, she really is a hypocrite, trying to take the moral high ground over exposing her teachers and then selling out a friend. I also don't feel one bit sorry for her financial plight, because if she was smart enough to get into Columbia (an EXPENSIVE university in an EXPENSIVE city), then she could have chosen a school that would've PAID her to attend. But both Vaughn and Luke seem like characters I'd love to hate, and it should be fun to watch their transformations (or lack there of). I like the flow and your dialog was natural and easy. Good stuff.

As a side note, every time I hear that song "what if god was one of us" I can't help but think: "we'd crucify his sorry **"... Because I'm heretical like that.

truly inspiring. the character of victoria and her thoughts were so intriguing and seemingly profound.
nothing else but pure genius.
short and deep.

muryoutaisuu.