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| hydra-star1 2008-10-05 ch 15,  | abuseThis is a gorgeous story. I really love it. You have some very real characters. The ending was perfect. |
| Arunesce 2008-03-16 ch 15, | abuseAwesome writing. I really enjoyed the way you dealt with the characters psychologically--they are so influenced by their cultural and political backgrounds yet ultimately are able to break free of their inhibitions. Very Fitzgerald-esque. And I totally agree with you on the state of literature today...I despise Da Vinci Code and I can't stand Harry Potter, or his fans. I look forward to reading your other stories. :] |
| Lorango911 2008-01-21 ch 8, | abusealright, is this turning into some twisted love square? cuz i'm seriously writhing on my couch wanting to know what happens without skipping chapters... arggh! |
| wandless 2007-12-22 ch 10, | abuseI dig your story, but you seem to have abandoned it. Which is fair enough, but it makes me a touch sad. Luke ** me off, he is a giant cliche of unoriginality, but I like Vanessa. She's real and believable. If you even read this keep writing because you've got a lot of talent. |
| X-Romantic-X 2007-12-09 ch 15, | abuseGreat story |
| X-Romantic-X 2007-12-09 ch 5, | abuseWow, she's really fiesty |
| DiddlingFiddles 2007-10-25 ch 9, | abuseDUDE. How freaking long does it take you to write a conversation between Luke&V?! I'd take like 2 days to write each response. They're so effing witty. |
| DiddlingFiddles 2007-10-25 ch 5, | abuseShe fell in love with T.S. Eliot after reading Prufrock. When she found out on the following day that her entire Literature class loved it as well, she felt a deep, angry, sorrowful resentment. She'd rather it had never been written, than the property of the horrible common monstrous masses and their idiotic good-natured and ultimately disgusting opinions. TOTALLY know what is meant by that. I LOVED how you described that concept. "gawdy is the word you're looking for" 98% sure that you meant gaudy. |
| DiddlingFiddles 2007-10-25 ch 3, | abuseThe Berry story is so sad. =[ Adding to fave stories. Too lazy to copy/paste the story ID yadda yadda yadda. |
| bangbangstartagain 2007-10-08 ch 15, | abuseperfect. this was awesome. your writing is flawless and your ideas...wow. everything is great. your characters were perfect in all their imperfections. fantastic work. + favourites. |
| Pundit 2007-09-20 ch 2, anon. | abuseWow, she really is a hypocrite, trying to take the moral high ground over exposing her teachers and then selling out a friend. I also don't feel one bit sorry for her financial plight, because if she was smart enough to get into Columbia (an EXPENSIVE university in an EXPENSIVE city), then she could have chosen a school that would've PAID her to attend. But both Vaughn and Luke seem like characters I'd love to hate, and it should be fun to watch their transformations (or lack there of). I like the flow and your dialog was natural and easy. Good stuff. As a side note, every time I hear that song "what if god was one of us" I can't help but think: "we'd crucify his sorry **"... Because I'm heretical like that. |
| muryoutaisuu 2007-09-14 ch 15, | abusetruly inspiring. the character of victoria and her thoughts were so intriguing and seemingly profound. nothing else but pure genius. short and deep. muryoutaisuu. |
| mythical 2007-08-04 ch 15, | abuseVery nice. Very poetic and philosophical at times, too. The characters were so different to what you usually see, especially your choice of female lead. Perhaps the ending was sudden, but I liked it. It was sweet in Luke and Victoria's unique way. One question: Do you think that people as self-absorbed as Madison seems to be ("My life could never be ordinary... I was made for something special... My destiny on this planet was decided...") could really exist? Good as a character, but would be quite annoying as a person. I can't come up with any real criticism, so congrats on a great story. Myth. |
| brittle hearts 2007-07-08 ch 15, | abuseIt was like reading an incredibly long, beautiful poem. Lovely job, although I thought the ending was a little rushed. |
| Tempest116 2007-07-03 ch 15, | abusehmm, well that was unexpected... |