I like the story because I felt the need of a person to be "taken care of" despite being taken advantage of. Well, that's how I saw Carmen - let's just say in a similar (but not so similar ^_^) manner, I know what it's like to be used up but try not to mind it.

I appreciate the emotions although the words were subtle but you have some mistakes - 1. "my hands automatically clench my hands into fists" repetition, try to rephrase that.2. "personal punching back" - i think you meant "punching bag"3. lastly, you began in past tense, so recheck your verbs because at the end, you used the present tense.

well, that's all. continue writing... ^_^

kiMI