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Damon Quartez 2006-07-10 . chapter 1
Hey Ruby,It's been awhile.I loved this so much mucho props.
Esquirella 2006-03-10 . chapter 1
This is a great emotional story. I loved it.
pumpkinjuice 2006-03-09 . chapter 1
Nice story, quick and to the point but still creating realistic images using the right amount of description.

I found the one really good thing about your story was the timming. It showed that the couple in the story did have a realationship that had lasted a long time even if it seemed to be one where it was mostly just sex.

Another good quality it had was change. Though the couple had that complex relationship it began to shift into something new at the end, even though there wasn't a blunt answer you left the audience feeling that things would be different between the two and more so then that, made them feel taht it would be a change for the better.Well done.
XxPunkBookWormxX 2006-03-07 . chapter 1
this was really, really good. i liked it a lot, keep up the wonderful work ;)
lostgirluk 2006-03-06 . chapter 1
beautiful, simply beautiful.
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