hi. i like this story. i like the idea that it posseses. i am a blind kid and this storry really touched me. although. it was short. the shortness took away from the work that U put into it. and the seperate HIS and HER idea are a little weak. i mean if U turned this into a real story with chapters. this would be a superve love story! try and do that sometime. i know that if U did. it would be a good story. will U please read any of my stories? my newest is called alpha the stone of knoliage. and read any other stories i have too.

wow! Most awesome. Great concept and well written. I love it...it's profound, yet so simple when you really think about it. Great job!

This is beautiful. I can't believe I'm the first to review this. This, which has a rhythm of it's own although it's not a poem. This, which is so profound as to let me think on it for hours.This is amazing, beautiful and peaceful. Lovely in a tranquil way.