I wouldn't submit this one. It's vampire-ish (I like vampires but I'm not sure you meant it to be that way). And It's difficult to read. twice you broke the sentence
e.g. : "... your twisted


Heart, how ... "

and

"...the back of my


Heart pulls me..."

It's because you moved heart to a new line. I don't know how else to say what I mean. The emotions are dull (not boaring)hard to get.
but It's actually flawless. so... that's all really.

oh, this is good, i like it!!

Great poem! That was awesome. I loved the decriptions. It told a very nice story.

Nice pice. I like the way it turns and twists. Well done.

I love this. Vampire poem, yes? It was very sweet, if not a little sad. Great!