Ok. I don't know if I've ever read a poem more beautiful than this one, and honestly, I've read a lot. There are many talented writers on fictionpress, but I can truly say that this piece outweighs any I've read.

The first two lines left me speechless. As someone else said, I dream about writing poetry as beautiful and as moving as this.

The constellation/star reference left me breathless.

And the last two lines
left me wanting more.

You have IMMENSE talent. I'd love for you to review some of my work and give me opinions/feedback. It would mean a lot.

I'm going to keep my eye out for you!

wow， nice ：）

I swear, my jaw dropped after I read the first two lines, which became even more open after the second stanza.

Really, just amazing. "collapsed bone structure" your word structure is brilliant.

I love the first two and last two lines best. The imagery is so delicate and beautiful but also almost sickly. Beautifully written.

Damn. Wow.

This is the kind of stuff I dream of writing.

Bravo.

abby

once again another good one!

~SarahJane

I love the poem, and I love the title even more.

I wonder what inspires you.

oh wow. this is great. i love the way it's written, the topic is great too.

this is completely amazing.

Those opening lines are so coldly elegant, so poignant, and - almost eerie, I think.

lovely and poignant. innocently beautiful.

you swallow pills as if you werecatching moons between your lips

-Amazing. Gorgeous. I swear this is one of the best (top ten at least) poems that I’ve read on this sight so far this year. I was mesmerized, the whole piece was perfection. I loved it.

Juliet.

that last line was spectacular and the "this collapsed bone structure of yours in a constellation because on stars can twist so much" is beautiful, perfect. the whole thing is simply amazing.

~* noelle